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This is my voice
It wasn't my choice 
I never learned to... be quiet. 

Graves are only boxes
I'm not dead yet, but who's counting?
The clock is
Time doesn't exist-
Clock's exist
I don't cut my wrist
I'm not pissed
But I'm sad. 

I want to be a writer
But instead, I'm bitter
Down comes the rain,
pitter patter pitter 
Against the window pane

I don't really know how to rhyme
But if I had a dime
For every time
I crumpled up a piece of paper,
I'd be rich.
But I'd have to give it all back for wasting trees. 

You can't win against society
They don't get that people come in variety
Causing people anxiety over their body
And the way they look.

They bring out the book
I say, "What book?" 
They say, "The bible."
Is it really that reliable? 
Christians are undeniable 
But it isn't justifiable.

What happened to "Jesus was a friend,"?
They put that phrase to an end
Is he a judge?
Religion's a drudge
Who can I love?
Following your rules
Much like fools

And I can't help but wonder if you're only scared
If you thought like this,
But no one cared. 
And you were unprepared 
For when people told you you were wrong.

So you're going to judge me now?
It's hate and judgement you should disallow  
Not being yourself. 
But we are society, aren't we? 

It's our neighbors we judge
Dragging through the mud
The sludge 
And the they we dress 
To impress our enemies. 
Wasting money on things we don't even want. 

Nobody looks the same
But everyone has to aim higher
Because beauty is the game 
Everyone wants to join in. 

This is my voice
It wasn't my choice 
And I'll never learn to be quiet. 


This is my very first spoken word poem. I'll probably add more onto it later when I think of more. I've been writing this all day. I really want to be a spoken word poet and go to Open Mic. Nights at cafes and book stores around, but I have performance anxiety so this pressure build up in my chest and I can't breathe, so it's going to take a lot of practice. Tell me what you think of this? Critique me, I should say.
Thanks, guys.
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DarkerHours Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Umm... in the line "And the they we dress" is it supposed to be "And the way we dress"?
(I like this poems so I'm just hoping you don't freak out that I tell you that you may have a grammar mistake ^^;)
Love the poem by the way! :iconiloveitplz:
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Actually I am right. You are wrong. No mistake.
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DurhamInLove Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
It was amazing totally relatable.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :')
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DurhamInLove Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Welcome.
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micha-tan Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Dappy..hiks..this is..too..awesome :icondesucraiplz:
Youre really great at writting..it's..*starts to cry*
It's...I cant say it with words..its..amazing poem..:iconcryforeverplz:
Heii..Dappy..can I make this into short story? //its inspire me to make a story..but Idk..if I can finished it or not ;v;
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sure you can, Micha! Go ahead! :'3
Give me some credit at least?
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micha-tan Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
Thank you Dappy!! :iconsweethugplz:
of course I will <33 and I will give the title for Dappy C: //if I can finished it! :3
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you!!!! :iconbunnyloveplz:
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micha-tan Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Your Welcomee <33 :iconsweethugplz:
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Vengefulpadre Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was a masterpiece
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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Vengefulpadre Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm christian but i do know the feeling.. I truly do
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LILGUMMYBEAR Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student
AMAZING
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU VERY MUCH!
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GirlIntoMusic Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist
This poem is so good.
I love the way you rhymed the words, they fit perfectly together.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!!
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JohnPatsakios Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Beautiful work, very evocative.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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LittleMissChess Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student General Artist
This poem is so.. so.. Aah, I love this!! Best poem I've read in a good while, without a doubt. It's just so truthful about the faults of society and the message really hit home. The transition between stanzas worked well; you flowed from one idea to the next. Honestly very impressed with this ^^ Great work!
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your support! I'm so happy you liked it!
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Link-Rar Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student Writer
This.....Poem....Be.....Freaking.....AMAZING!!!!!(I'd say it was awesome, but that word is overused)!!!!! Keep up the good work!!!
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks you very much I'm so glad you liked it!!!
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Link-Rar Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
And we are too. :)
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconiloveyouplz:
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was... well, fucking awesome! The emotion and anger that comes through in this piece is clear-cut, but such strong, bitter feelings are justified because society, rather than giving you hope, has only given you despair once again.

It's a story that a LOT of us will be familiar with; just when you think there's hope for the human race, someone else proves to you very quickly that there isn't. There's also the fact that you keep trying your heart out to become a writer, yet you continue to struggle... crumpling all that paper and trying again and again. We can clearly feel the concepts of pain, struggle and frustration coming from this piece.

The last few stanzas also drive your point home: Who are we to judge others, especially when we're far from perfect? Everyone lives a different life, and that will never change. Unfortunately, most of us won't realise that... society can be so ridiculously sad when they use unrealistic ideals like magazines to judge body shape, or biased newspapers to form an opinion, as examples. Finally, the last three lines speak an incredible bravery and confidence as well, and should be used to shut down our detractors.

I think now I'm starting to ramble on, so let me finish with this: I don't know how many poems you've crumpled up, but you need to start digging through the trash can again if poems like these are what you're capable of. It's a well-written piece that will resonate with lots of people, myself included. It's heading into my favourites, end of story.

Pristine poetry, pal! :iconbravoplz:
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so, so much for your comment, your support, and your critique! I was almost dreading the end of the comment! I'm so glad you interpreted my poem so well, it's like you swiped it from the tip of my tongue, and put it into your own words. It was almost poetic itself!
Thank you again! You've made my day entirely!
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It was my pleasure, really. I'm glad my comment had such a positive effect. =)

A well-written poem will do that for me, to tell the truth. Yours was one such poem. =)
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm very pleased you think so!
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Eri-Cha-an Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I fucking love you :heart:

This is inspiration! I'm gonna go keep writting my book now, why? because this was INSPIRING! Maybe I'm saying too much... but I can't stop, this is so good! I was wondering if I could use the last three lines in my book (with credit to you of course) so can I?
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I love you, too! ~:heart:~
Thanks for all your support! And I'm really glad I inspired you! That literally made my day! Thanks so much!
I suppose you could use them as long as you give me some credit, at least.
Thanks again, love!
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CherryTheNinja Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
This was fantastic~<3 YOU'RE FREAKING AMAZING~~<3
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awe thank you Star!!!!

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CherryTheNinja Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Yw~<3
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PhilosopherOfSound Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
If you are past drinking age...a glass of wine helps, and knowing that there's always going to be someone, at least one person who needs to hear what you have to say on any particular night. Just speak to that one person when you're standing up there and don't worry about the rest. Read out on the street when you get a chance, just talk to the wind and keep it real. Go for it!
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha well thank you! But I admit I'm only in my younger teens. But I'll try then when I'm of-age!
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Froggeh-BOOM Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Omg. This was amazing. Everything about it just....It`s one of the best things I`ve ever read. I love how you made the rhyming words stand out, and just cgdigdifvger Everything about it is fantastic.<3
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awe, thanks Frog! That's sweet of you! It means a lot! ~:heart:~ I'm so glad you liked it!
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Froggeh-BOOM Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013
WELCOME<3333
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LaCiCi Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wow. This is really good. And in my opinion the society and religion thing were really accurate and on the spot. The fact you bold the words that rhyme gave a great impact, and put much emphasis to the poem ^^ Great work!
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! And thanks for critiquing! It means a lot to me!
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LaCiCi Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
No problem! And if you ever need someone to critique your work just ask me :)
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Romana201 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. I enjoyed it.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! And thank you for taking the time to read it!
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Romana201 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's no big. ^-^ I enjoy poetry and things of that nature.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, as do I. Writing's my passion! What about you~?
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Romana201 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've written quite a few poems, and I've tried stories. I can get a few short stories, and they turn out alright. But...yeah. ^-^ That's really all I'm truly capable of that I don't hate after a while.
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly what you mean!
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Romana201 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Feel free to check out the stuff I've done. ^-^
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AnnieBird Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will!
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